Tri Duong

I
Am an arrogant chauvinist
With an inflated self opinion and
A humble, pinkish skin.
Where did I go wrong?

Our Government
Is a lame work horse
That fails to move the load
Or a black pustule that oozes
A festered corruption.
Where did they go wrong?

Society
Is the lurid crust of psoriasis,
Splitting and bleeding ignorance,
Held to the Body only by the fibrous
Tension of amino acids like "Church" and "Cult".
Where did we go wrong?

Religion
Is the gruesome, twisted legs of polio,
In place to hold the Body up,
Now merely limiting its movement
With surges of debilitating shock and parochial insights.
Where did God go wrong?

I
Look to the moon for comfort,
To evaporate the agony of realization
With her pale glow, and take deep breaths
In hope of catching her scent in the breeze.
She has never steered me wrong.
83 Responses
  1. Tal Zahn Says:

    Ain't that the truth... =/ But we gotta make the best of the world we can, and not let its flaws overtake us.


  2. grizz Says:
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  3. Harry Says:

    Another great poem. So true.


  4. Saint Fox Says:

    Really shows life in a different light.


  5. TweakzGaming Says:

    thats actually quite accurate, nice. daily rounds =)


  6. Epic Fitness Says:

    Great poem, almost made me tear up


  7. leanbeef Says:

    holy shit, picture made me trip balls


  8. Randy Says:

    Actually never before have I liked to read poems but yours are really nice and smooth to read. You have a nice style!


  9. Alex Says:

    still you make me feel goose bumps


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  11. r0cksTar Says:

    awesome poem!

    keep up the good work



  12. Nessa Says:

    Wow, very nice, love the poems here.




  13. Mike Says:

    decent blog man! likin it.


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  15. brendan Says:

    i could never write poetry



  16. iMonei Says:

    like it, it does it's part without getting preachy. good looking.



  17. Mike Says:

    this is some pretty powerful stuff.


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  19. JQ Says:

    do u write these?


  20. and yes, i do write these to all questions above and below (people just don't read)


  21. Complex Says:

    Like them. Wish I could think how to write stuff like these.


  22. awesome blog keep it up!


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  24. SpinningJim Says:

    Nice pic bro! Loved the verse about the government :)


  25. Saus Says:

    So this is the place...!




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  27. Him Says:

    I really like this one.


  28. Definitely like this one.


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  30. Orzo Says:

    interesting read dude

    spread the love sometime you know how


  31. Fuuuuuuuu Says:

    super cool story bro



  32. Megafayce Says:

    The beautiful thing about poetry is you cannot break rules, you can only set them. Love and peace



  33. TLX317 Says:

    this is a great poem



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  35. Moose Says:

    Great poem. Makes you think


  36. Your poems are incredible! And just seen you are from France! First part of my travels :D


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  38. applecider Says:

    I like how you start each stanza with a single line just meant for the subject of the stanza




  39. Red Says:

    dont rly dig poems but this one is pretty good tbh



  40. haybiebs Says:

    good stuff, i can relate.


  41. Harry Says:

    Read it again and love it.


  42. Dan Says:

    WOW, actually like this :]


  43. ThanhSy Says:

    The one about the government is the truest. Good work man




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  45. SgtChili Says:

    hi!
    Its a little difficult to understand poems if english is not your first language, but the parts that I understanded are very cool.

    following you.


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  49. Dante Says:

    i actually really enjoyed this. with a little bit of work and organization you could definitely find yourself in journals and compilations.

    following to track your development



  50. Daniel Says:

    Beautifully written Caroline, I wish I had your level of talent so my composition class would be a little easier ;p


  51. Wolfsprout Says:

    love this bit:

    I
    Am an arrogant chauvinist
    With an inflated self opinion and
    A humble, pinkish skin.

    so beautifully described, so vital, so vivid.


  52. hunter time Says:

    that was very beautifully written. i'm very impressed




  53. Depressingly accurate, why can't you write about more happy things. i_i


  54. Zykei Says:

    Good work, looking forward to more :)


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  56. Art, I find this really good. Something I'm not capable of.


  57. Dan Savio Says:

    i absolutely love this, but have to disagree on one thing, religion should be attributed to man, not God. man fucked religion up.


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